Twidye Heart Chapter 1-2

[Chao Shadow]

this is a new series book i'm writing, please rate 1 out of 10 and why!
and i was forced to name the girl Shinobi. * kate holds me a gun point*

Chapter#1 “Ready or not here I come”! New Student in D.C.S.S Boarding School!

It was a Normal Day at Eastside School of the Arts for Inyouka Ahtagarto; He was in his Math Class, studying Long Multiplying and division Combined together that is Really hard all of the student where stumped. The Teacher, Mrs.WingFields was sitting on her desk in front of the Class Calling Kids up to answer Questions she wrote on the board and laid here eyes on Inyouka, Who was Reading his Mathbook.
“Inyouka Ahtagarto, What is 345 Times 123 divided by 864 times 5324 using mental math,” She Said. Inyouka stopped reading his Mathbook and looked at Her in a Bored way and said,” is it, 26148.03”? Looking at the teacher and saying it a second after she finished talking to him. She looked into her answer sheet, Inyouka was correct. She looked up at Inyouka.” Great job!” She Said. Inyouka Smiled. “ Comes with being the smartest kid in school.” He said. The other students mumbled and complained to Inyouka saying “ Cheater” and “Teacher’s pet” but he did not care about their remarks. Inyouka looked at his wristwatch on his right arm; it was 3:27 PM.
“Inyouka, I’m amazed by your exception in this school”. The Teacher Said without warning. Suddenly, the School Bell Rang 3 minutes before 3:30 PM as normal, signaling that it was time to leave school. As The Students got up from their seats, Inyouka took his time preparing to go home. He packed all his books into his Book bag that was strapped to the back of his Desk, unzipped it and walked out the classroom into the hallway when he was later Sidetracked by his Friend Marco. He was a Normal C student Teenager and he hanged out with a genius like Inyouka.
“ Hey Inyouka, I was surprised with your mental math in class today, it took you less then a second to answer!” Marco blabbed was he followed Inyouka through the hallway. The bell finally stopped, returning the peaceful sounds of Students Stepping through the halls. “ I guess it was pretty Sarcastic too” Inyouka Said. Marco Laughed. “ Your answers are always sarcastic sounding, even on tests!” Marco Said. “ I don’t know why I’m so Smart, I was bored one day and “read” my textbooks” Inyouka said Sarcastically. Marco Smiled. “ You know what?” Marco Said. Inyouka Turned his head to face Marco and Replied, ”What”. Marco Chuckled. “ Your Funny, Nice and Smart, try to find a girlfriend. You may get lucky!” He Said. Inyouka Smiled. “ I don’t need one, at Least now”. “ Why, almost Every Person is dating and all the girls want you” Marco said. Inyouka sighed. “ Not to be mean, but many people forgot about with true love is, I end it there!” yelled Inyouka. “ I guess I tried, but your right!” Marco agreed.
Inyouka Walked home after that, leaving Marco at behind at school for some peace and quite. When he got home, no one was home. He hurried in his room and jumped into his bed. “ Finally, I can rest”. He said. While he lay on his bed, he thought that he heard a crumbling sound. He got up from off his bed and looked on his covers; there was a note he did not see when he dived in to his relaxing bed. He picked it up and read it aloud.

Dear, Inyouka,
Please pack some shirts, pants, Food, Bed sheets, Etc. and your computer into the living room. You are moving out for a great reason.

From,
Your Mom & Dad

Inyouka was confused, he was moving out! For what reasons he deserved this. He was too nice to other so mush. He was never bad. He was a grade A+ Stu… Suddenly, he knew. He was going to boarding School! He jumped up into the air yelling “ Hell, Yeah!” He began packing up until his parent’s drove in the driveway. They drove a 2003 Aztec of the color red. It was the family car Inyouka’s mom used for work, by the looks of things; it looked like they came back from the store. He ran outside. His parents walked up to him carrying a letter. “ Congratulations Son, we got a call from your school and they enrolled you in D.C.S.S. Boarding School” Inyouka’s Mother Said.
“ What is D.C.S.S Boarding School?” Inyouka Asked. His Mother Handed Him The letter.” It’s a Boarding School that means Divine Child Supreme Sanctuary Boarding School. It’s a Boarding school for Kids with IQ over 125. This school enrolls Smart kids from all over the world and you will love it” Said Inyouka’s Dad. Inyouka’s Mother Smiled. “ They have a Hot spring, Mobile homes for each student, gourmet Food, 10 mile campus, a small town for the students. And it owns a part of a beach!” Explained Inyouka’s Dad. “ Oh my god, i been enrolled not in a school, but heaven!" Said Inyouka. “ There’s only one Rule, make three Fs and you are kicked out of the school” Said Inyouka’s mother. “ Sounds, Easy I want to go!” Blabbed Inyouka. “ Great, the bus is coming at Seven o Clock Am Tomorrow, so get ready!” Inyouka’s Dad Said Happily.
“ Inyouka, there is a Year book of all the people that are enrolling that came in the mail too, it’s in the car.” Inyouka’s Dad said. Inyouka Dashed into the passenger door opened it up and picked up the book that sat in the seat in the "Shot gun" seat. He opened it and searched through names, he heard on familiar Name, but she had no picture. ”Shinobi Enoti? Does that name sound familiar?” asked Inyouka to his Parent. “ That was your Play Friend in 2nd Grade when you where eight years old.” Inyouka’s Mother said. Suddenly it flew open like an open book, the memories. But because of the picture missing he forgot what she looked like. “ Ah, Are son has a girlfriend at that school, sounds like a bad love story.” Said Inyouka’s Dad. Inyouka sighed. “ Yes, we were just play around Boy friend Girl friend until she moved away, I hope I can find here” Said Inyouka. “ If you meet here, try to hook up!” Inyouka’s dad said. “ I don’t know, after six years she probably forgot about me. Darn I wish the picture was in here” Said Inyouka.
The Next day, Inyouka’s alarm when off at Six Forty Five AM.
Knowing the Bus will stop at his old school at Seven. He got dressed, got his bags and ran to his school without looking back. His parents where asleep still and didn’t want to drag it out. When he reached the school, it was six fifty nine. The bus was still there too. The bus was a silverish color with gold strips across each side of the bus. The hood of the bus was labeled in Gold text “ DCSS Boarding School”. Without wasting anymore time, Inyouka ran inside the bus, inside the bus was like a city bus, padded Seats with a TV above your head. There was only about five children inside the bus, Inyouka walked to the back of the bus and sat down, then looked out the window. Suddenly, Inyouka saw someone’s hand sticking out form under his seat. Inyouka looked down. “Why are you under the seat?” he said. Suddenly a voice from under him said, “ Shut up, I’m a stowaway!” The voice-sounded familiar, Inyouka looked under the seat and fond Marco Rolled up in a ball. “ Marco, what are you doing here” Asked Inyouka. Marco crawled out from under the seat and sat by Inyouka. He was covered with dust and what looked like throw-up. “ Marco, you should be in school, why are you on the bus?” Asked Inyouka. “ My parents are Retarded and will not care if i don’t come back, I go to school on my own free will” Explained Marco. “ How did you survive under there, by the smell of you, you smell like an old Banana” Said Inyouka. Marco Smiled. “ Inyouka, your may best friend, where ever you go, I go!” Said Marco. Inyouka Smiled. “ True, I guess so you can share a room with my and hide in my room when I’m in class.” Inyouka Said. “ Sure. So you’re going to D.C.S.S Boarding School?” Asked Marco. “ Yes, from what I heard, it’s heaven!” Inyouka Said. Suddenly the bus doors shut, cutting off the fresh morning dew air to the smell of gym sock then the engine started up. Inyouka covered his nose because of the smell as Marco took big smell of it, inhaling it. Inyouka was about to throw up. “ You can’t be Human Marco!” Inyouka said nearly choking. Inyouka Hold his breath and struggled to open up the steamy bus window and when he opened it up the bus filled up with the smell of car exhaust. Inyouka began to choke from the thick air. “ Breath through you mouth retard!” Said Marco. Inyouka looked down and saw fungi growing under the seat. Suddenly the bus began to move, venting out the smell. “ Thank…God!” Inyouka said sound like he just Un-surmised himself from water. Marco was unaffected by the smell. “ Your not human Marco!” Yelled Inyouka. “ Please, my room is fifty times worse!” Said Marco. Inyouka did not expect that from him. Inyouka looked at him with confusion. “ Did you come for some reason beside we where friends?” Inyouka said inhaling fresh air. “ In fact, yes. This is one of the best school ever, with girl form all over the world, I will get a girlfriend!” Replied Marco. “ Speaking of girls, there is a girl named Shinobi Enoti I knew in 2nd Grade that is there!” Said Inyouka. “ I don’t know here, she sounds nice… oh you have a girlfriend there!” Marco said obnoxiously to piss Inyouka off. But Inyouka did not get mad he sigh and said” Not really we used to be play mates, no one liked her because she had light purple hair and people called her a clown and I did not care, you can say i used to like her.” Explained Inyouka. “ Wow, Natural Purple hair, was it real?” Said Marco. Inyouka laughed and said, “ Yes, her hair pigments has a rare code so her hair was naturally purple!” Marco smiled. “ Is it not your hair is naturally red for the same reason?” Marco said. “ Yes, in fact I keep on forgetting about it looks brown” Said Inyouka. Marco begins to look out the window. “ You know, are life is going to change when we are there, friends, Girlfriend, parties and searching through paper yelling “ I don’t have time for this!” ” Said Marco
Even Inyouka knew he was playing around, he was right even the “I don’t have time for this” part. Inyouka got up and looked around the bus. The students from are school and other schools sat by each other playing and talking to each other. Suddenly Marco got up and turned on the TV on his side of the set; he was watching some cheesy sitcom called “Full House”.
Inyouka looked at Marco as he gazed hopelessly into the TV. “ You know it’s Fake” Said Inyouka. Marco said staring at the TV “ Must…. Watch!”. Inyouka looked out the window. “ Goodbye Westover, Hello D.C.S.S Boarding school!” Inyouka said.







Chapter#2 Shinobi Enoti? Is that you?
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About a four hours later. The bus finally stopped in front of a place that looked like a civic center. The sealing looked like glass and the wall was made of brick. There was a sign on the front wall that said “ D.C.S.S Boarding School where the smart thrives!” Suddenly tons of kid crowed around the bus. Marco was Sleeping for an hour now and most of the kid on the bus was sleeping as while. Inyouka was awake, With his head sticking outside looking at the school as far as he can see. From the looks of there were tons of Mobile Homes behind the school the smell of the ocean lingered in the air. To the Left of the school there was a small wooden shack that had a sign on top the said “ Hot Spring. For Students only”. And further down the school was a bunch of building and Shops. The Door suddenly flung open, opening are gates to paradise. Inyouka began to push Marco to wake up; he opened his eyes slowly and yawned.
“ Are we at the school yet?” Said Marco in a sluggish way. Inyouka grabbed his things from on the seat and got up. Marco Yawned and got up from his seat and turned off the TV. Then Inyouka and Marco walked off the bus. They stretched their Arms and Legs and took a whiff of the ocean Air. Suddenly an Adult walked up to Inyouka and Marco and handed them a Key and said. “ Welcome Smart minds to D.C.S.S Boarding School Your Mobile home is 31705 please if you have any money buy some locks and supplies at the school store in the left hand corner of the school.” He Said. Inyouka Grabbed the key and the man walked off. “ Wow, we need a map at this school” Marco Said. Inyouka and Marco Walked behind the school to find there Mobile home, There was What looked like thousands of Homes until they fond theirs. It was the last one that was by a wooden bridge that led to a beach. There was about ninety kids playing in the ocean. Inyouka and Marco walked up to the mobile home. On the door there was a letter that said “ Reserved for Inyouka Ahtagarto. Thankfully Marco could share Inyouka’s room with him since it was Free. Inyouka inserted the key into the doorknob and twisted the knob and pushed it open. It had the smell of a hotel. Inyouka turned the lights on. Inside were two beds, two dressers, and two nightstands with an air conditioner indented into the wall. Above the beds was a same TVs in the Bus Above the beds. Marco Ran in and Inyouka dumped his heavy Bags and Sheets onto his bed. Marco jumped on the other bed and laid down on it. “ Do you have any sheets and pillow I can have?” Marco suddenly said without warning. Inyouka Sighed reached into his pocket and pulled out One hundred Dollars. “You Stay here, I’m off to get supplies” Said Inyouka. Inyouka Walked outs of the Mobile Home and walked to the school store, which was to the right of their Mobile home. Inside it looked like your normal Grocery Store. Inyouka Walked to the Bed Sheet and picked some up for Marco then As he was walking to the Locks and Security Area a Shy girl walked up to Inyouka slowly and with caution. Inyouka looked at her; she had short light purple hair that went to her ears and she was wiring a long blue sweater that went to her knees, she had Wooden flip-flops with a pink strap around her feet to keep them on. She had blue eyes that made her look nice and sweet the sense of fear seemed to run through her. “ Excuse me” She said Shyly. “Yeah, What!” Inyouka Said. She jolted back a step. “ May I Pl…Please borrow Fifty cent to buy a hair clip” She said in a scared way like Inyouka will bit her head off if she sad the wrong thing. Inyouka Smiled. “ Sure, what about Five dollars. But only if you don’t be so scared of Asking for Something” Inyouka Said. He reached into his right pocket and puled out five dollars and handed it to the girl. She grabbed it slowly and walked off, without saying ‘‘Thank you’’. “ What an odd Girl, why was she so shy?” said Inyouka to himself. Suddenly it hit him. Purple hair… that was Shinobi Enoti! Inyouka was shocked not to see it before but the Purple hair Gave it away, Inyouka Ran to find her, but she was gone. Inyouka paid for the stuff and ran back to his Mobile Home, where Marco was watching his TV on his Bed. “ Marco, I think I fond Shinobi Enoti!” Blabbed Inyouka. Marco Looked at Inyouka in an annoyed way. “ What did you say to her and what did she say?” Marco said. Inyouka sighed. “ Nothing, both of us did not notice each other at the time, she just asked me for fifty cent for a hair chip” Inyouka Explained. Marco shook his head in disappointment. “ Inyouka she had Purple hair, should of it rang a bell of what ever is in your head your Tell you it was Shinobi!” Said Marco. Inyouka Looked Mad. “ I guess I’m retarded” He said. Inyouka sat down on he bed.
“You know there throwing a School welcoming Party for you in the Gym?” Marco said. Inyouka looked at him in a Smiled. “ A Party, she may be there, I still have a change to meet here!” Inyouka Said as he got up, ready to leave his Mobile to the Gym until Marco said suddenly,” Inyouka, It’s not until tonight at nine o’ clock!” Inyouka looked at Marco in a mean way and said,” You’re trying to piss me off!” Marco smiled in an insane looking way. Inyouka was getting tired of him; he walked to the door and walked outside. When he was outside he looked around. “ Not that I like here it’s I want to say hello and get to know with each other after all these years.” Said Inyouka. Suddenly a unfamiliar voice from the right of him that said,” Cute, who are talking about?” Inyouka looked to his Right, a girl with a navy blue school uniform with a skirt, wearing what looked like Slip on Sandals she had long Brent hair that went to her shoulders and brown eyes. “ Hello, my name is Jessica Ongote. I see you have a girl crisis,” Jessica said. “ My name is Inyouka Ahtagarto, and I don’t want to talk about it” Inyouka said. “ Who is it, is it me?” Said Jessica. Inyouka looked at her in a stern way. “ Hell no, I don’t need a girl Friend” Yelled Inyouka. “ Inyouka or what ever you’re Japanese Name is, it sound like you have girl problem and I can help you” Jessica said strongly. Inyouka looked mad but calmly gave in, and by giving in cursing himself out in his mind as he told Jessica what bugged him. “ There is a girl named Shinobi Enoti I’m trying to find. Do you know anything?” Inyouka said calmly. Jessica looked shocked then Said, “ Shinobi Enoti does not need a boyfriend after here old one used her just of status and ruined her live!” Inyouka ‘s reddish like eyes grew narrow. “ Is that why she shy and scared to talking to anyone. When I knew Her in second grade she was playful and Sweet” Inyouka said. Jessica Smiled. “ Yes that’s one reason and ever since she moved here she had no friends until her “ boyfriend” Used her and now she spaces herself from human contact “ Jessica Said. Jessica reached into her Back pocket and pulled out a Picture and handed it to Inyouka, He grabbed it and looked at it. It was a snapshot of kids playing basketball inside a gym with black Bleacher behind them. “What’s this for?” Inyouka asked. Suddenly he noticed that in the background was Shinobi Enoti Under the bleaches just sitting there away from the players. “ I tell her to cheer up but she never talks, most people thinks she is mute.” Jessica said. Inyouka sighed. “ If she is so quite why does she tell you those things” Inyouka asked. Jessica smiled evilly. “ She does not, I read her diary!” Jessica said. Inyouka looked at her in a mean way. “ It’s Her diary, how could you!” Inyouka Yelled. Jessica Shrugged Her shoulders and said,” It’s helping me help you get info on Shinobi!” “ True, but how did you get it” Said Inyouka. “ Duh, I Share Mobile homes with her!” She said. “ What’s her room number?” Said Inyouka. “ It’s 31701, Exactly from the right from here but Shinobi will not answer it, wait a hour before your welcoming party she is helping with the decorations” Jessica Explained.” What, you want me to sneak in, get it and get in here Business” Said Inyouka in shock. “ You need to if you want to find out how she ticks.” She said. Inyouka was confused, find out on his own or snoop around like a Crazy hobo.” I’ll come, but you read from the diary” Said Inyouka. Jessica sighed hopelessly. “Fine, just don’t blab about what I tell you!” yelled Jessica. Jessica walked off to her Mobile home, leaving Inyouka in the mist of confusion and questions. “ Should I snoop around, or just let Shinobi notice me” said Inyouka to him self. Suddenly, Inyouka stomach began to growl; he was hungry since he has not eaten since last night. “ I will take my mind off her, let’s try the “Best” food they said they have”. Said Inyouka to his stomach.
Later, inside the mess hall, that looked like a fancy Diner. Wall paintings of angels and clouds. Long, driftwood Tables and seats at the right side of the Mess hall was a tray rack with a plate covered in tin foil, Inyouka walked up to the Tray rack and picked up a plate and sat down at a table. No one was inside the mess hall but Inyouka, every step and noise he made echoed through the Room. He took off the Tin foil; on the plate were lobster and a potato with 4 ketchup packages. There was a Venting machine if you wanted a soda or coffee. After he ate his lunch, he walled the halls, exploring the school excepted the gym, he guessed it was where the party was. Not to get nosy, he continued to walk until he was outside again, in front of the jungle of Mobile homes, he laid on a corner of the walls, reached into his pocket, and pulled out the picture that Jessica gave him and stared at Shinobi under the Bleachers. He blushed; he shook his head to snap out of it. But after he stopped shaking his head he stared again, he tried to stop but it was hopeless to hide it from himself anymore. He loved Shinobi Enoti.

[Chao Shadow]

damn typing is hard

Just trying to read that was hard.

[Chao Shadow]

....i read a 20 year old book on how to write that's why. 3& 4 chapter will be out next week!

[Ryo Misaki]

Mmm... You fail at line breaking.
I think, expecially when publishing on the net for people to read, you need to double space at paragraph breaks to give the eyes a rest.

Dont over do it, but dont keep it one massive block of text, either.

Also, why are there so many words that are capitalized when they shouldnt? Like, almost the entire first paragraph and such... It's weird.

Anyway, I havent finished reading it. Too tired. Will do later. ^_^;;;

[Chao Shadow]

ok, thanks RYO