Mr.Anderson's FanFic Discussion and Progress - Love Hina & Negima Forums

**Mr.Anderson** · #1 (**permalink**) 28 Mar 2007, 5:26 am

Or something like that..

If you've read my FanFic you can discuss it here or suggest things.
I'll also tell thing about the progress.

This chapter (5) is taking a bit long since I'm laking time to write it and I've decided to describre more of the surroundings and such since I'm really bad at it and never do it. Sometimes my I just can't seem to get the words right...

So you know a way to describe the surroundings without taking the pace from the story, please contribute.

Zero Eiyuu · #2 (**permalink**) 30 Mar 2007, 1:55 pm

Oh my, sorry Mr.Anderson, I stopped reading your fanfic on Chapter 3, gimme a sec. I'll read your fanfic and give you some feedback on it after the weekend.

I'll try to give you some helpful advice.

**Mr.Anderson** · #3 (**permalink**) 31 Mar 2007, 9:34 am

There's no rush, unfortunatly exams are coming, we need to finish our three man project of the year (profileproject) and loads of other things.. When I can I'll write but I haven't even wrote another line since the first post.

**Balmung** · #4 (**permalink**) 31 Mar 2007, 1:21 pm

If you ever need someone to post so that you don't Double, call SIMON...I mean ...Ranma. I'll have him demonstrate his skills momentarily.

Zero Eiyuu · #5 (**permalink**) 2 Apr 2007, 2:26 pm

Well from re-reading your fanfic over the weekend I found that I think you're just kind of following the the begining of Love Hina a little bit too exact in your story. I honestly think that's bad unless that's what you intended too and in that case you've done a top notch job. Although an advice for your first chapter is that you point out that it's Keitaro's point of view because I got confused at that until I read your second chapter.

As I said before I still stick to it that you're really great at writting in Su-sama and Keitaro-kun's point of view, it's amazing how you do it so well.

I see no other things to say about the story thus far except for some minor spelling errors and such. Although I still can't wait to see what happens in the story.

**Mr.Anderson** · #6 (**permalink**) 3 Apr 2007, 2:33 pm

Well the next chapter has to wait a bit.. Currently I had to make book reports on four books while I only read one, so after reading several summarys and reports on them I had to make the questions, a summary and a special assignment. And now hope that the one book, of the eight, they choose to discuss with me is the one I know best..

It is my meaning to follow the beginning, I used it to make sure everyone knows a bit of what's going on, perhaps I could point it out in chapter one that it's Keitarou's point of view, but perhpas I'll keep it this way. And well ofcourse the spelling error's are to be expected.

But I utmostly, let me say that again, UTMOSTLY appreciate that you all like the way the point of view switches every chapter and that I did a great job foing so. It's an experiment I got while reading Time Piece where every chapter you see both sides of the vail if you catch my drift. I just decided that every chapter wouldn't work for me.

But after these kind words of you all I just have to sacrifice my weekend to try and make another good chapter to please you all

Zero Eiyuu · #7 (**permalink**) 4 Apr 2007, 10:45 am

(points at the spelling error of 'foing' that should be doing.)

Just joking. But I'm glad that my words have brought some joy to you. Please take your time because a rushed story just doesn't have the same feeling. Good luck on your...ahh, haha, one book report.

**Mr.Anderson** · #8 (**permalink**) 24 Apr 2007, 7:41 am

Well if you guys wanna know, I've joined quite a bit RP's in a Gaia Online RP forum and well, let's just say that I got some ideas.. Still need to work them out better so that they fit my fanfic.

And about those book reports, well I finished them and got some sort of test (spoken, need to awnser questions and such) and since I really hate to read on command, the fact that half of the books where read last year I did pretty well, according to the teacher, and she gave me a 6/10 to 6.5/10. Which is great since I never read half the books.
Also, the questions awnsered about the books I did read where awnsered the most poorly and those I didn't read where ok.

Another thing about the RP stuff, the reason why I think it'll help me write better is that I practice almost everyday now and that you need to describe a lot of things. So I hope that my next chapter turns out to be better that I would dream it to be.

**Mr.Anderson** · #9 (**permalink**) 7 Jun 2007, 3:25 pm

(Double post, sue me)
All right, it's now official. Her Green Under the Red Moon is on hold until further notice. I tend to write piece and end up deleting them (or other parts) and I'll continue doing that but the story isn't progressing in overall.

On the other hand I have started (just now.. well 12 minutes ago) a new project.

Birthday.

In two days it's going to be Kaolla's birthday, what will she do and hope for and what will Keitarou do? It resembles something written by Zero Eiyuu, however I can't seem to find it so I have no proof and it resembles HGUtRM in PoV. Meaning it'll switch after each passing day (normally chapter but this will most likely be a one shot).

**Balmung** · #10 (**permalink**) 8 Jun 2007, 2:27 am

*Sues Mr. Anderson for a Kajillion dollars*

Alright then, sounds great ^^

*blows whistles and brings up the Fanfic Cheering squad* GO-GO-GO-GO!!!

**Mr.Anderson** · #11 (**permalink**) 9 Jun 2007, 7:45 am

STOP CHEERING.. That one shot now has around 1800 words and 9000 character.. And I've only just had the morning of the first of the three days.. That's around 16000 words when I'm done and 81000 characters!

**Mr.Anderson** · #12 (**permalink**) 11 Jun 2007, 8:28 am

You can cheer again... If needed I'll delete some lines but I hardly got any further........ Ah well, back to typing then.

Zero Eiyuu · #13 (**permalink**) 11 Jun 2007, 11:02 am

Alright, let the cheering commence! We must support Mr.Anderson on his hard work and hope for the best from him!

And why delete lines? I can understand if you'd delete them because they may seemed unrelated, but never delete just for the heck of it, longer stories are awesome and making them run on is nice! XD

Go Go Mr. Anderson!

**Mr.Anderson** · #14 (**permalink**) 11 Jun 2007, 4:42 pm

I was more referring to deleting lines that are better show later or earlier on (I write them down, find a better place, write them down there too and delete the other.). Or really strange sentences and then try a different approach to make them easier readable.

Many thanks to my pre-reader who thinks this forum is way to big to join XD

**Balmung** · #15 (**permalink**) 14 Jun 2007, 2:04 pm

OS!!!! *Puts on Elite Beat Agents Outfit (Japanese Ver.)*

IKUZEI!!!!

GO GO GO!!! :XD

**Mr.Anderson** · #16 (**permalink**) 14 Jun 2007, 4:17 pm

Well, a few good happenings.. the night before last night... uhum. I had inspiration and started writing. I've upped the progress (for those with me in their msn can check the personal message to see the progress) from around 11,11% to 22,22% (whay, doubled!) and.. I graduated!!!!! Tomorrow I'll be picking up my grades and the 28th at 21:00 GMT+1 daylight saving time I'll be having the graduation ceremony.

I'd say, keep on cheering.

another thing about that night of inspiration. I had to be sure of the ending before I could write much, so I expect another leap anytime soon, I suddenly got an idea. The beauty? It all fitted with what I had written earlier. Like randomly laying down pieces of a 1000 piece jigsaw puzzle and then trow the remaining pieces in the air. and they hit the ground in the exact right shape. all you have to do is put the groups of pieces in the right spot.

**Mr.Anderson** · #17 (**permalink**) 7 Jul 2007, 2:00 pm

Ok, so I forgot what my idea was but now I have a new one. Kinda the same as my previous idea but then again I'm not sure since I forgot it....

Anyway, I think I'll start writing the final part of the first chapter tonight when I should be asleep. And with a little luck I'll have it posted by tomorrow. I know I wanted a one shot but it's going to be a story with three chapters that will cover one day each... And I'll apply the changing Point of View I also use in Her Green Under the Red Moon. (Which I hope to continue soon aswel)