Zero's Fanfic Discussion and Progress - Love Hina & Negima Forums

Zero Eiyuu · #1 (**permalink**) 4 Oct 2007, 11:20 am

Well... err... YO!

Now that all introductions are over with, lets see...

So if you've read any of my fanfics then you're in the right place. If you'd like to discuss, praise, bash, or suggest anything towards any of my fanfics, most likely Path of Love, then go for it, I'll listen and take in all of your comments thoughtfully.

What the hell is 'Path of Love'? That's my latest fanfic with the most updates so far. It's in the fanfic section of this site and also at fanfiction.net. Anyway though, ya.

I'm currently working on Chapter 4 of the story as well as the intermission. The intermission's gonna be funny, especially with Hinarei-sama and BobCat-sama in the scene, heh heh.

Anyway... it took me nearly months to update to chapter 3 before but that was because I was bored stiff, but now I'm working on it none-stop so I'll update soon. No more slacking off for me.

My other fanfic, Shingetsutan Tsukihime: A New Life, is coming by kind of slow, I've run into quite a few walls into that one and also... not many people know what Tsukihime is on this site so sucks for me!

Read my Kanon Fanfic before? Well you should know I'm writting a sequal for that as well, heh.

If you remember my first fanfic I wrote here called Heaven's Plan, then you're in luck. I'm re-writting that as we speak!

Now as I am thinking of my ideas I am always open to any thoughts. Thus far in Chapter 4 of Path of Love, I've got a few interesting twists and turns. First of all Motoko shows Keitaro some compassion, Shinobu and Su bond some more, Naru and Kitsune plan some devious things to do, and some craziness happens when Keitaro applies to do the Tokyo University test.

So yeah...

**Mr.Anderson** · #2 (**permalink**) 6 Oct 2007, 6:29 pm

So far I can't point out things to improve except maybe a few spelling errors.

Since this is more of a general one I'd like to tell you something about something I found;..

“Love can be a harse thing, especially to those with a fragile find or a fragile body. But when the love between to people who truly love each other is made, they can go through anything, as long as they are together.”

Both of your (if not more) valentines day fanfics start with this sentence. A good way to start it but I was wondering if you did that on purpose.

Other then that, go on with your wonderfull writing, your fellow writer Mr.A..

**Balmung** · #3 (**permalink**) 6 Oct 2007, 11:32 pm

My review will be coming shortly, but from what I've seen of your fanfics. I look forward to reading this one

Zero Eiyuu · #4 (**permalink**) 9 Oct 2007, 11:15 am

Honestly I kind of did that on purpose kind of thing Mr. Anderson. The true purpose of that was just to get the reader thinking a little bit and get some kind of warm feeling in their heart... really hope THAT happened.

And Roy... Roy Roy Roy Roy Roy... hope you like the story XD.

**Mr.Anderson** · #5 (**permalink**) 9 Oct 2007, 2:31 pm

I thought as much, but I once typed the (well actually wrote) same sentence twice while writing different things.

So how are your idea's coming along? (For mine are as dead as a person in a closet who recieved a grenade as a warning shot)

Zero Eiyuu · #6 (**permalink**) 9 Oct 2007, 2:44 pm

Whoa there Mr. Anderson, you've really run into that big of a wall? That's not good at all... As for me I've hit walls on everything except for Path Of Love, I just don't know what to do anymore about my other fanfics. but Path Of Love is all I can think about, heh. I've got some interesting ideas, though some ideas seem to close to the manga and anime but I'm in the midst of changing that and making things my own original idea, but that's just so hard since there are so many stories on Love Hina that've been done already!

**Mr.Anderson** · #7 (**permalink**) 10 Oct 2007, 6:29 am

If anything, it'll be your story. You really shouldn't mind other fanfics to much, of course if you want to avoid really simular situations you could.

And yes, the wall's pretty big and solid, I'm still wandering around to search for a hidden trap door or crack where I can get past it... Also I can finally blame some time loss on school, though most of the time it's me just watching anime and participating in RPs..

Zero Eiyuu · #8 (**permalink**) 19 Oct 2007, 3:11 pm

Crap... I've hit quite a big wall now and I just don't know how to end my story! I mean I've got an idea but I just can't put it together without spoiling the drama and suspense I want the readers to feel! I mean... man, this chapter is kind of boring and I wanted it to end with in a big way, just can't seem to do it though...

Let's just say that in the end Kanako is suppose to do something dramatic with Keitaro. Nothing bad or anything, just REALLY surprising.

**Balmung** · #9 (**permalink**) 21 Oct 2007, 12:57 pm

Hmm Show him her panties?! Kiss him?! END UP IN A SCENE THAT COULD BE MISINTERPRETED?! *cough* Sorry

**Mr.Anderson** · #10 (**permalink**) 22 Oct 2007, 5:50 am

Dump him for Seta

*ahum*

Right, I wouldn't know.. For now I am unable to grasp how you see Kanako in this fanfic, I guess you have to do it for now. Make it look good, grasping, make it.. You. (A figure of speech...)

Zero Eiyuu · #11 (**permalink**) 23 Oct 2007, 2:50 pm

Honestly in this story I'm trying really hard to make Keitaro build a relationship with everyone in a familiar way. In some ways he will get attractions from everyone, but not so much as Haruka. I got plans for her. But I just have to tell ya... it can still be anyone's pairing... it's just on how I wanna write this all.

To be honest the highest probability of pairings are any of these.

Keitaro / Shinobu
Keitaro / Naru
Keitaro / Su
Keitaro / Yukari
Keitaro / Motoko
Keitaro / Mutsumi

I... i just can't really write a romance story with Keitaro and Kitsune, that's something I just can't work with. If I could I would, but meh. Of those 6 pairings I honestly don't know how I want things to work out.

Oh yeah, I've broken through the Chapter 4 wall and will be submiting it in maybe 2 or 3 days... possibly more if I get lazy, which will most likely be the case, heh.

**Mr.Anderson** · #12 (**permalink**) 23 Oct 2007, 3:26 pm

I'm very curious of how you made this chapter, into what, where did you came to a stop, only to co faster then ever before

Zero Eiyuu · #13 (**permalink**) 26 Oct 2007, 2:40 pm

Ugh, this just shows how lazy I am.

I'm on the computer most of the day here and I have all the time I want to type of the next chapter but I'm getting sooooo very lazy and I just keep getting sidetracked! I mean, I only typed up 1/3 of the chapter! I've really gatta stop with this. Oh well though, you can be sure that I'll definetly get it up by next chapter, prepare yourself in this chapter for somethings that are very very strange will happen.

Ryo Misaki, Eva-san, myself, and hinarei will make some slight appearance as plot devices in the next one, heh.

**Mr.Anderson** · #14 (**permalink**) 26 Oct 2007, 4:54 pm

And you think you're any different then me? I do everything on my laptop.. When I'm @ School, I'm online. Showing, most of the time, that I have time to loaf around. When I'm at home, I'm online. Which means I can loaf around. I should be working on my fanfic(s?)!

**Balmung** · #15 (**permalink**) 26 Oct 2007, 7:33 pm

It's a common fact that all writers/manga-ka/anyone whose relatively creative is a LOAFER.

And we should take pride in that

Zero Eiyuu · #16 (**permalink**) 29 Oct 2007, 3:02 pm

I must admit that I'm happy that us writers are such lazy loafers and all. But come on, us being lazy is post-poning our works sooooo much, it's just getting annoying! I mean come on!

**Balmung** · #17 (**permalink**) 29 Oct 2007, 4:40 pm

Here's a pairing...

Balmung/Haruka >_>

*hopes his own brigade doesn't start thrashing him

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