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    𝘊𝘰𝘯𝘴𝘪𝘨𝘭𝘪𝘦𝘳𝘦 Aoshi Shinomori's Avatar
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    Dude that was an awesome story! Never would have expected lock...
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mr.Anderson View Post
    *Nods approvingly*
    Since it's 02:31 here I will not whine about any spelling or punctuation because then I'd have to read it again. I am here story wise.

    I really like how you turned something innocent into something so frightening (again I ish spolied, dun mind me >.> ).

    It's probally because it's a short, but I personally think Lock went haywire a bit too fast. If you had in mind that Lock had been hearing that music longer you might have giving signals of it earlier in the story. But that's just me.
    Well, its not stated in the story itself, but I think an explanation is owed in order to make it understandable. Lock snapped so fast because he was under an immense amount of pressure due to the school exams he had just taken, if he didn't pass them, his parents were going to basically disown him , so all that stress just lead to him going insane.
    To be more precise, its just easier to say he was practically insane by the time the group had arrived at the cabin, the walk just gave him time to think and that finally sent him over the edge. The only reason this isn't stated in the story is because by the time Ryo got to him, he was so far gone that all he could think about was stopping the music in his head.

    (P.S. I'm not so good at picking out small things, so if you find any grammar mistakes, just tell me and I'll fix them ASAP.)

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    I like this very much. I especially love the fact that I lived, and that I was mostly sane (after I went to the psychological place). But what I love most is the fact that I miraculously aged 4 years (or more) .

    But Zac...I thought you said only one person would live in the end?

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    Yeah, well, its not mentioned, but its implied that ryo will kill you, ms narufan

    It was an entertaining read mr zac, although my character seemed gay in some places . I never trusted that lockx >_>

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    I know that Ryo'll eventually kill me, but I'm still alive in the end....
    And you will never rename me narufan. Give it up .

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    It was an entertaining read mr zac, although my character seemed gay in some places .
    And this is different from normal because...?
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    Perhaps a last minute executive decision. O_o

    K kicking major arse == epic win

    And HA! Ryo killing you? That's almost laughable

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    Lol, im like the straightest man there is .

    Im thinking this is the song that lockx and ryo were hearing endlessly
    YouTube - NHK Pururin

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    I'm always epic win .
    And that song...is extremely annoying. You may be on to something, Selo.

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    my gosh thats awesome Zac!


    and i know i made comment in the SB before i read it about parents...

    how abouts you change the back story a little so that it's just my stepmum with my dad not having any care either way.

    And then add some exotic crazy people that i hang around with sometimes outside of the college when i wasn't with the selo, hina, KK, and Ryo as the other reason i went nuts. Make it so that one of them had gone crazy the year before and i'd eventually got it from them after an incubation period. like you implied with ryo at the end.

    oh and i agree that song would be definitely enough to drive you nuts! lol


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    incubation period oO

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    well yeah...

    heya zac.

    you want to do a follow up to that together? bounce it about for a while then one of us type it up? it'd be interesting though i can understand if you'd prefer to do it yourself seeing as it's your story


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    Woooow! Absolutely EPIC!
    And these cliffhanger twist ends are amazing. XD

    I must say, though... You had me absolutely PINNED!
    “I hope so, I don’t think I can afford to repeat any of these courses next year…”. <~ didn't I say something almost exactly like that to you the other day on IM? Oo

    Sad that Hina had to go first... But I suppose someone had to. (Shoulda been Selo! XD)

    Incredible work, sir! I loved it!

    I look forward to your next! ^_^

    And hahaha! Gayish Selose... =P
    I must say, though, if it WAS the Pururin theme... I WOULD wanna kill anything to make it stop. T___T. (Can't I just have Misaki-chan instead? XD)

    Hmm... Well, I DID hear the song at the end...
    However I don't think it implies that I'll be killing KK... Just that I'll be killing SOMEONE. (Or a lot of people. Either way. XD)

    Plus, if I hadn't seen her in several years... And she's just on the phone somewhere a way away from me... Its doubtful that I'd go way out of my way JUST to seek her out and kill her.
    I'd just kill everyone around me. =P

    It would take me a while to be driven mad enough to kill by the song, though... Even if it IS Pururin. XD
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    Yeah, about the next....

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    Does everyone piss you off? Pururin will make it all go away
    So yesh, annoyong song ^^'

    Thanks for the explination that defenitly makes sense. Anyway, we are looking foreward to your next story where you further change faithfull animeb members into abominations.

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    Quote Originally Posted by lockx View Post
    well yeah...

    heya zac.

    you want to do a follow up to that together? bounce it about for a while then one of us type it up? it'd be interesting though i can understand if you'd prefer to do it yourself seeing as it's your story
    A joint project eh? Well that sounds interesting, but it'll have to be number 4 I'm afraid, I already have my next story lined up.

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    Ahhh, the Z story, right ? I'm looking forward to that.
    So does Ryo kill me? I'd sorta like to know .

    Interesting idea, Lock...do you mean each of us would write a story? Or just meanyou would write one?

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    Alrighty, since people seem to have taken a legitimate interest in this, I think I've come up with a fun idea. To anyone who is interested, write up your own little short horror story and send them to me Via PM, I'll read them and choose one as a winner, the winning story gets posted here and the winner gets to help me make Horror story #4. Alright people, get writing, submissions are due by Oct. 13th, and may the best twisted mind win.

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    Sounds fun! I only have minimal homework, so I'll start it tomorrow. Any rules/guidlines we need to follow?

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    Not rules per say, just make the story Horror based and have it in by Oct. 13, that's about it.

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    Hmmm. they where all brilliant. and the first one was bloody.

    Incorporate me into one of your storys! i could win!
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