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    Zac and Lock's Little Corner of Horrors

    Hello all, I've recently decided to start writing a bunch of random short horror stories, and at the suggestion of a few people I'll be posting them here. So expect a new story to show up every week or two and to make things a little more interesting, I've decided to take the idea's from the viewers, so every so often, I'll ask the readers to post an idea for next weeks story. The process is first come, first serve, so the first idea I see will be the one used, (Unless it is a joke or spam). I hope you guys enjoy my work and feel free to give me constructive criticism or tell me what I did right. Okay, enough babble, let's start this horror show, shall we?

    Those who Cannot Forget
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    Hector Benson never believed in the supernatural, he was never interested in sitting around the campfire and listening to people weave tales of ghostly encounters, nor had he ever been afraid of any bogeymen that may have been lurking underneath his bed or within his closet. To him, these were all irrational and unwanted wastes of time and Hector never was one to waste his time, but in contrast to his distaste for the irrational, he was also a very proud youth and as such he never turned down a bet or dare, and that is how our story begins.

    Late one Autumn day, Jonathan Weiland, a classmate of Hectors, approached him with an interesting dare; John and three of his friends were heading up to the old Balden house that night and in an attempt to see if the rumor about Hector never turning down a dare was true, decided to ask him along, and as always, Hector accepted. So Hector met up with the four boys at 9:30 as they had discussed and together they set off for the abandoned house on the outskirts of the town.

    After finally reaching their destination, the five young boys found a loose board covering a window and managed to climb into the main foyer. It was here that John took the opportunity to explain the story of James Balden and why this was a house everyone in town avoided. Apparently, in 1978, James Warwhith Balden had been a successful pharmacist and entrepreneur, he was highly respected in town and his pharmacy was never at a loss for customers, to say the least, James was living the good life.

    As they say however, all good things must come to an end; in the spring of 1982, James Balden accidentally prescribed the wrong medicine for a young girl and as a result, the little one who’s name was Annabelle Greyford died. After losing a lawsuit to the Greyford family, James was forced to close his pharmacy and his medicinal license was revoked, consumed by grief over the death of Annabelle and the loss of his livelihood, James locked himself away in his estate and was found dead, hanging from a rafter in his upstairs bedroom two weeks later, the only clue he left to his suicide was the last entry in his diary, a single sentence had been written on the last page, “All I ever had is gone, but even now in my despair, she will not forgive me.”

    With the story out of the way, Hector and the others made their way up to the room where James Balden had hung himself, once there, John pulled a solid oak Ouija board from his backpack and set it down on the floor. An uneventful hour had passed and Hector was about to pack up and set off for home when he heard one of the boys gasp, turning around he saw that the silver pointer was indeed moving on its own, mostly because the four others had backed a clear distance away from it, he cautiously moved forward and began to read off the letters while John wrote them down, the final message caused John and the other three boys to run out of the room terrified, “Those who cannot forget, will never forgive.”

    Halfway down the stairs, John realized that Hector was not among them and unwilling to leave him behind, ran back to the room, what he saw there would scar him for life. The room looked as if a bomb of gore had gone off, blood splatters, bits and chunks of flesh and innards, and even whole body parts were spread around the walls and ceiling, but what was most disturbing was the half transparent little girl who was using a severed finger to draw childish pictures on the walls, she turned to look at John before disappearing with a childlike laugh.

    Asides from myself, John and the others never told anyone about what had happened, who would have believed them? Even I had trouble digesting what he had told me, but seeing as I had known John since grade school, I had no reason to distrust him, funny thing is, I received a phone call from John the other day, he sounded shaky and unnerved. He told me that the other night he had heard what sounded like a child’s laughter coming from outside his bedroom door, the only thing odd about that is that both his children are grown and away at college…
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    meeep.

    [though excellently written, I must say]

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    Ugh... [action=#1MOTOKOfan]shudders[/action]

    It was really good, and I enjoyed it, but you did have a few places where there were run-on sentences. My suggestion is that you replace those commas with periods, snd you're all good to go!

    And...a thought popped into my head just now. It might be a bit disturbing, but do you think you could incorperate the people of animeb into your stories? That would be really cool....weird and grotesque, but cool

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    Quote Originally Posted by MotokoFan
    It might be a bit disturbing, but do you think you could incorperate the people of animeb into your stories?
    Hmm... Kinda like the "HORROR Tales of AnimeB"?
    Sounds brilliant! Could detract from some of the artfulness of some of the stories, but would make amazing side projects for humor. ^_^

    Besides... I've been killed around here enough times... Why not make a story out of it? (Kei's fic aside. O_o)

    Anyway, great story! I really liked it. ^__^
    Could have been a bit longer and much more depth than that one incident... But then I suppose it would have been more than just a short story.
    Great job, though. =P

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    Horror tales of animeb would be great actually :O. Should get to it zac, and have Ryo die in every story

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    Oh my... I'd be like the Kenny of AnimeB. O_o

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    Sorry Ryo, no Kenny for you. But, I will be using some of the people of Animeb in my stories and people WILL die, I'm a man of my word.

    *Laughs Maniacally*

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    Double meep.

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    I sense a disturbance in the force...

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    I suspect we have no fathomable idea just how bad this could get... =P

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    So Zac, who're your next victims (if you chose to take my suggestion into consideration)?

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    My next victims huh? Are you sure you want to know? (And yes, I'm using your suggestion this time).

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    Yep, I'm pretty sure. I'd like to know if I'm a victim or not, mainly .

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    That was a very good story Zac. Please write more.
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    Indeed, more power to ye, Zac

    Who else knows what he's got in his bag of tricks o_O

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    *someone who has some responsibillity here and shouldn't have left peeks his head around the corner*

    Ahem, yea, ^that^ is kinda my sorreh. Anyway I am glad to see that there are some creative minds still here and active in out little corner in the creativity corner (a corner of a corner?). Props RDKnightZac, I'll be looking foreward to your further work in these SHS' (Short Horror Stories)

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    Ohh... An Anderson! Welcome back!

    And Zac! When is our next story coming?

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    Hehe, good to be here. As soon as I found someone to change the maximum amount of characters in your custom title to at least 46, I'll take full responsibility for the brigade moderation again ^^'

    Anyway, I was thinking the exact same thing, RDKnightZac's story was good enough that I could rep it on the spot. We want new stories!

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    Alright...Alright, calm down people, ask and thou shall receive as they say. Note to people, In cameo stories, I don't go for accuracy as much, so don't get offended if the character looks or acts nothing like you.

    Weekend Retreat
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    A young man walked down the hallway of his college, both relief and dread filled his head as he moved forward, “I wonder if I passed any of my exams” he thought to himself, “I hope so, I don’t think I can afford to repeat any of these courses next year…” His thought process was cut short as two young men came barreling down the hall, yelling his name as they went, “RYO!!! Wait up will ya!” a tall boy with short blonde hair yelled as he finally caught up with him, “Yeah, its almost like he’s trying to avoid us Hina” the other boy said with a mock expression of hurt on his face.

    “Sorry guys, I’ve just got a lot on my mind right now” Ryo said as he began to walk again, “If I didn’t pass these exams…” he was once interrupted by Hina as he slapped a hand on his back and leaned over his shoulder, “Come on man, you’ve been studying your ass off for the past year” he said reassuringly, “If you fail any exam, I’ll give you Selo’s car.” With that, the other boy with long dark hair snorted as he turned his head angrily towards Hina, “Like hell you will!” he said with contempt, “The last time you bet my car, it took me three months to get the stains out of the back seat!”

    Ryo let a small smile spread across his face, Hina and Selo never failed to amuse him and right now, he needed all the stress relief he could get. “So, Ryo-man, what do you have lined up for break?” Hina asked nonchalantly as the three walked through the main doors and out into the campus parking lot, “Nothing really, just catch up on some games and draw I guess” he said before Hina clasped a hand on his shoulder, “Then it’s settled, if you have nothing planned, then your coming with us!” he said grinning ear to ear, Ryo looked back at Hina and Selo as he raised his eyebrow, “With you? Where?.”

    “Where? Where else?” Selo said as he wrapped an arm around Ryo’s shoulder, “Me and Hina rented out a cabin near Lake Gosmen” he said excitedly, “And we even got Lock and KK to come, so you’d better not say no!” Defeated, Ryo let out a sigh and turned back to his car, “Alright, when is this trip anyways?” he asked as Hina and Selo let identical grins pass over their faces as they ran over to Selo’s car, “Right now of course” Selo yelled as he started his car, “ASAP, on the double!” Hina added as he flew into the passengers seat; “Why am I not surprised” Ryo muttered with as he started his own car and proceeded to follow the two.

    Ten hours, four stops, six missed turns, and a blown tire later, the group finally arrived at the cabin and it was a sight to behold, “Wow guys, how much did you shell out for this?” KK asked as she looked at the sizable structure while Hina and Selo got out of their car with look’s of pride etched across their faces, “Eh, wasn’t much” Hina said nonchalantly, “Yeah, about a hundred between the both of us” Selo finished. Ryo was transfixed more by the tranquility of the area than he was about the size of the cabin, “After the stress of the exams” he thought to himself, “This is exactly what I need.”

    After everyone was settled and unpacked, the group got together and began to plan out their vacation and after an hour of deliberation, they finally agreed on a schedule, “Alright, so we hit the Lake tomorrow morning and then its off to town for the rest of the day, everyone got that?” Selo said as he leaned over the dining room table, “I expect you all to be up at 9am sharp!” With that, everyone shared a laugh and moved off to do their own thing as Lock waved to the rest of the group, “Hey, I’m going for a walk, I’ll catch you guys in a bit” he said as he walked through the front door, “Alright then” Selo said as he switched on the TV, “Don’t get lost, we’re not in the mood to go looking for you” Hina finished as he sat down beside Selo.

    Early the next morning, Ryo was abruptly awakened from a pleasant dream as Selo took a flying leap and landed square on top of him, “Oof.” Ryo yelped as he rolled out of bed, taking Selo with him, “What the hell is the matter with you?” Ryo said in an agitated voice as he reached for his glasses while pushing Selo off of him, “Well, it was either this or we would have just left you Mr. Ungrateful” Selo said as he stood up and moved to the doorway, “Now hurry up, everyone’s almost ready as it is.”

    Ryo changed into new clothes and grabbed his swim trunks as he flew down the stairs, almost running full on into Lock, who was looking a little worse for the wear, “Hey Lock, you okay?” Ryo said as he turned around, “You don’t look so good.” Lock looked as if he hadn’t slept in weeks, but he put on a smile and turned around, “Yeah, I’m fine, I think I might of caught something though…” he said slowly, “But its nothing, I’ll be fine soon enough, now lets get to the car before they leave us” he finished with a laugh.

    The water was crisp and clear as Ryo jumped in, he noticed Hina and Lock had chosen to remain on the beach, but didn’t pay it much mind as he raced KK and Selo to the dock floating in the middle of the lake. As Ryo reached the dock, he received a helping hand from KK, who had easily beaten both men due to her affiliation with the college’s swimming team, Selo managed to drag himself onto the platform soon after and shook a weary fist at the her, “No fair” he said incredulously as he struggled to catch his breath, “Its not my fault I’m better than you” KK retorted as she stuck her tongue out while Ryo laughed.

    With the sun high in the sky, the trio made their way back to the beach and were packed up and ready to go when Lock walked over and tapped Hina on the shoulder, “Hey man?” he asked as he shifted nervously from one foot to the other, “You think I could talk to you for a sec? In private?” Hina gave Lock a quizzical look, but put a hand on his shoulder as he began to lead him down the beach, “Sure, why not?” he said with a grin, “You guys head into town, we’ll catch up later okay?” Ryo shrugged as he turned around, “Alright, but don’t expect us to wait for you” he said as the three piled into his car and drove off.

    “Alright Lockie boy, whatcha need?” Hina asked as they we’re walking down the beach, “Did you meet someone special?” Lock shook his head and looked around nervously, clearly uncomfortable, “No its not that…” he said as he brought his gaze back to Hina, “I just wanted to ask you to stop playing that song.” Hina stopped and turned full circle as he looked dead on at Lock, “Stop playing what song?” he asked in a confused tone, “I’m not playing no song” Lock looked up angrily at Hina as he stepped forward, “Look, I’m not asking much, just turn it down okay?” he said as Hina turned around, shaking his head, “I think you need to get your ears checked man, your hearing….”

    Hina’s sentence was cut short as Lock’s hand flew over his mouth and the cold steel of his pocket knife severed his spinal cord, Lock held his hand in place until Hina stopped screaming and let his lifeless body fall to the ground. Lock stared at his bloody knife for a few minutes before grabbing his ears in frustration, “Dammit, DAMMIT! I can still hear it…” he mumbled as he turned around and started heading back to Selo’s car, “It must have been someone else… yeah, it was probably both of them…” he finished as he reached the car and got in, “One down, one to go…”

    After spending an hour in town, the three eventually decided to go back to the cabin to see what happened to Lock and Hina, “What? Did they decided not to go or something?” KK wondered out loud as Selo turned around in his seat, “Well it doesn’t really matter, I’ll go in there and drag ‘em out if that‘s the case, this isn’t the time to sit around and do nothing you know!” he said loudly as he pointed forward, “Onwards driver! We have lazy people to rescue!”

    As they reached the cabin they noticed that Selo’s car was indeed there, “Alright you guys, just wait here and I’ll be back in a sec” Selo said as he jumped out of the car and dashed into the cabin. Twenty minutes had passed and Ryo and KK were becoming impatient, “What, are they messing with us or something?” KK said in an agitated tone, “That’s it, I’m gonna go get them” she finished, but Ryo put up his hand as he opened the drivers side door, “Don’t worry about it, I’ll go, just wait here okay?” With that Ryo walked out of his car and to the cabin, unfortunately, a surprise greeting was not what he found inside.

    Lock stood in the middle of the kitchen, mumbling as he moved back and forth while the axe he held dripped fresh blood onto the linoleum floor, Selo’s headless body could be seen slumped against the wall while his head rested neatly on the kitchen table. “I’m sorry…” Lock mumbled as he looked up and noticed Ryo standing in the doorway, “I didn’t…I didn’t mean to kill him, I just…wanted him to stop the music…”

    Suddenly Lock’s gaze shot up angrily as he looked at Ryo with a gaze filled with hatred, “No…not again…It’s you…YOU! STOP PLAYING THAT DAMN SONG!” he yelled as he lunged forward while swinging the axe in a viscous arc, giving Ryo only a moment to get out of the way as he dove underneath the strike and rolled into the opposing wall. Lock moved menacingly towards the now trapped Ryo and raised the axe high over his head, “Now, I’ll end this, and then the music will stop…” he said while laughing softly, “I CAN’T STAND IT ANYMORE!” he finished with a scream as he began to bring the axe downward.

    Ryo closed his eyes and quietly prayed for KK’s safety, but a resounding crack caused his eyes to snap open and he almost lost his lunch at the sight that greeted him. KK was standing over the lifeless form of Lock, the bokken he kept in his trunk was gripped firmly in her hands and a dent was clearly visible in Lock’s head as blood began to pool around him. “KK…” Ryo stuttered as he slowly got to his feet, he was about to thank her as she fell to the floor and began openly sobbing, “Selo…Hina…Lock, their all dead” she said as Ryo pulled her into a comforting embrace, “I want to say its okay…” he said slowly, “But I’m afraid you wouldn’t believe me even if I did” he finished as he pulled out his phone, “Alright, let’s get the cops up here, they’ll know what to do.”

    Five years had passed since that day, but Ryo never forgot, the nightmares had been vivid but they eventually passed. Grabbing his phone, he dialed a number and a female voice picked up moments later, “Hello? This is KK.” Ryo smiled, she had taken things the worst and had to spend two years in a psychiatric ward, but she was out now and doing well, “Hey KK, its Ryo, how’ve you been?” he asked as he sat down in a nearby chair, “I’ve been good, I have a job at a Veterinary Clinic now” she said happily. A puzzled look came over Ryo’s face as he tapped his phone’s speaker before talking, “Hey, you mind turning down that music? I can barely hear you.” he said with a laugh, KK’s response was less enthusiastic, “Ryo…there’s no music playing near me…”
    ©RDKnightZac, 2008

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    *Nods approvingly*
    Since it's 02:31 here I will not whine about any spelling or punctuation because then I'd have to read it again. I am here story wise.

    I really like how you turned something innocent into something so frightening (again I ish spolied, dun mind me >.> ).

    It's probally because it's a short, but I personally think Lock went haywire a bit too fast. If you had in mind that Lock had been hearing that music longer you might have giving signals of it earlier in the story. But that's just me.

 

 
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